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Steven Lee Harris
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Posted on Saturday, September 22, 2007 - 02:33 pm:

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I want to thank you all for your critique. The trip to Chicago gave me some time to digest your advise, and I decided to revise the opening of my book (Rise from the ashes). I killed the unnecessary adverbs...scratch that. I killed the adverb usage, the use of "that", and ramped the action up in the intro. I would appraciate any further feedback from you on the revision, posted in the pbc workshop.
Again, thank you for your advise, and experience.
Steven L. Harris

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