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Dennis Collins
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Post Number: 2212
Registered: 06-2002

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Posted on Thursday, February 08, 2007 - 05:52 pm:

I guess I shouldn't try to hijack someone else's thread. I'll start over with my own.

OK, I want some brutal criticism here before I invest in envelopes and postage. The actual letter is formatted with my name and contact information neatly centered at the top but something happens when you cut and paste these things.

Dennis Collins
3433 Port Austin Road
Port Austin, MI 48467
(Home) (989) 856-8045 (Cell) (989) 963-0052
theunrealmccoy@aol.com

The First Domino

Joe Pellerito thinks he can murder his way into the mob. Surely the execution style killing of three Detroit police officers in a single afternoon will demonstrate the ferocity and courage that is so respected by the family.
The scheme actually draws the opposite reaction and Joe becomes the hunted and is forced to flee to Italy where he believes he can find a new identity and start his life over.
The intense investigation by Albert McCoy and Otis Springfield, a couple of Detroit police detectives eventually identifies Joe Pellerito as the prime suspect puts them on his trail, but the mob has its resources too and is also in hot pursuit. Who will get there first?
Otis Springfield has just been promoted to Detective Lieutenant. The triple cop killing is his first case in his new position but he faces other tragedies when his mother dies of a massive stroke at the height of the murder investigation. Only after the passing of his mother does Otis learn the story of the father he never knew. He is torn between his duty to solve the homicides and the compelling desire to unearth his extraordinary heritage.
The “McCoy” series that features a trio of characters, Detroit cops McCoy and Springfield and their PI buddy, Michael O’Conner. At slightly over eighty thousand words it is complete and ready to submit. The story contains elements of violence, love, redemption, discovery, and patriotism.
Another novel in this series, “Turn Left at September,” was released in November of 2005 through Behler Publications, a small mainstream publisher. “The Unreal McCoy,” the first book in the series is available through Independence Books.
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Dennis Collins
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Pacwriter
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Post Number: 2778
Registered: 04-2002

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Posted on Thursday, February 08, 2007 - 06:29 pm:

Gave it a shot -- for what it's worth :-)

Joe Pellerito attempts to murder his way into the mob. The execution style killing of three Detroit police officers in a single afternoon demonstrates his ferocity and courage. The scheme backfires and Joe becomes the hunted. He flees to Italy to begin a new life with a new identity.

Detectives Albert McCoy and Otis Springfield work to stay a step ahead of the mob to locate Pellerito. Who will get there first?

The triple cop killing is newly promoted Lieutenant Otis Springfield’s first case. He must deal with the pressure of finding the killer while mourning his mother. He is soon torn between solving the homicides and the desire to unearth his extraordinary heritage left by a father he never knew.

The “McCoy” series features a trio of characters, Detroit cops McCoy and Springfield and their PI buddy, Michael O’Conner. The story contains elements of violence, love, redemption, discovery, and patriotism at just under eighty thousand words.

Use this in your resume. Another novel in this series, “Turn Left at September,” was released in November of 2005 through Behler Publications, a small mainstream publisher. “The Unreal McCoy,” the first book in the series is available through Independence Books.

http://www.perrycomer.com
http://throughablindeye.blogspot.com/

Dennis Collins
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Posted on Friday, February 09, 2007 - 11:22 am:

Thanks Perry... Anybody else?

Dennis Collins
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Bill Nelson
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Registered: 10-2002

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Posted on Friday, February 09, 2007 - 03:59 pm:

I will never put myself in the position of a crtic (a personal thing.)

For those of you who would venture forth, this might be a help for you:

OUTLINE FOR A CRITIQUE

1. My first impressions of your story:
2. The plot:
3. The characters:
4. The action:
5. The dialogue:
6. The background:
7. The overall story:
8. The theme:
9. The technical details (spelling, grammar, scientific or historical
details), etc.:
10. What I loved about this work, and why:
11. What caused me problems, and why:
12. Final comments:

Ervin E. Harmon
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Post Number: 24
Registered: 10-2004

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Posted on Thursday, February 22, 2007 - 06:24 am:

Hi Dennis Collins :

Web-sites to check telling about Query Letters:

http://www.tarakharper.com/faq_qery.htm

Also I typed " author Query letter " in on aol search engine at :
http://aolsearch.aol.com/aol/search?encquery=d19d82e38999fffc5ddefce6b9033034ca1b834c32e4cb68&invocationType=keyword_rollover&ie=UTF-8

You might search on other search engines. Good luck in finding good info and your writing.

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