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Bill Nelson
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Post Number:
1890
Registered: 10-2002
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Votes: 0 (Vote!) | | Posted on Saturday, April 15, 2006 - 09:03 am: |   |
I have four short stories posted at www.spoiledink.com/bison, if any care to read and comment, I will appreciate it.
To those who don't, phhhhhhhhhhhhhttttttttttttttt! |
Claudia Turner VanLydegraf
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Post Number:
2626
Registered: 06-2002
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Votes: 0 (Vote!) | | Posted on Saturday, April 15, 2006 - 09:55 am: | |
I just read Girl of My Dreams Bill,
Very interesting story. But the ending left me wanting to know a bit more. It was a good, although somewhat vague ending and I would have liked a bit more of why she came to him and more outcome from the mothers point..... but maybe that is just me. It was a charming story (there were a few typos in there) and all in all, very well written. You have a dramatic sensibility about your writing that gives the reader a bit less than they want so that they really do want that little extra tidbit. Good story, great way of writing it.
Claudia
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Bill Nelson
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Post Number:
1892
Registered: 10-2002
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Votes: 0 (Vote!) | | Posted on Saturday, April 15, 2006 - 01:10 pm: | |
Claudia,
I don't have a clue as to why the young lady appeared. Maybe she was attached to the energies of the house? |
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